*~Book Worm 16~*
Wordsmith
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A Poem I Wrote
i am drowning, slowly drowning;
The water has leeked in.
Rising, slowly rising;
There seems to be no end.
I am drowning, slowly drowning;
I plead for help but to no avail.
Sinking, slowly sinking;
I am going under.
I am rising, slowly rising;
My head breaks the surface.
Breathing, deeply breathing;
Has it come to an end.
I am floating, lightly floating;
I rest my weary head.
Sleeping, softly sleeping;
It has come to an end.
Please tell me what you think!
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just_aiv
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Oh wow! That's such a depressing yet beautiful poem. It's wonderfully written. Fantastic! Do you have any more poems you're willing to share? I would
love to read them.
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emilyy
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It's lovely. 
"It's just pure mindless vandalism" Nathan (Misfits)
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marebear
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its a really good poem i personally enjoy poems like this
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damenIZhott
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depressing, indeed
Jace is sooo HOTT!!
"We came to see Jace. Is he alright?" -Clary
"I don't know," Magnus said. "Does he normally just lie on the floor like that without moving?"
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Lady Disdain
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I like it! It may be depressing at the start but ends in a hopeful way.
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reading101
YA Bibliophile
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I think it is a captivating poem. It makes you want to read more and know what happens next. I like it alot.
Boys in Books are just Better
"If you wanted me to rip my clothes off all you had to do was ask."- Jace <3
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